Need some feedback/constructive criticism

[Playa]

I was challenged at work to put together a promotional video for a new sales tool I built last year.

I have little marketing experience and NO video editing experience. So if you can spare 2 1/2 mins I'd appreciate the input before I present it later this week.

[ame="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YG1jghOhBos"]Sales App Promo - YouTube[/ame]

[hot_rod_eddie]

Without knowing more about your target audience it is difficult to give 100% advice. However, from my years of seeing proposals, I feel you did a pretty good job. The voice over is clear, concise, and follows the media without being over powering. The information is easily received yet appropriate for the application. The layout and animations are informative and interesting. Some things that always both me are:
1) slides verbatim with the voice or presenter
2) too much information
3) not enough information
4) busy or bare slides
5) over use of animation
To this end, the only thing I would change would be the bouncing talking points at the end. Otherwise it looks good from what I can tell.
Good luck

[flywise]

All in all it seemed like a good video.
I heard the word romance 1x but in my opinion the word magic might work better
Like" this is where the magic happens "
I have 0 marketing or video making experience

[yaqui]

Who, what, where, when, why and how. Looks like you covered it all. Maybe a tag with email contact info at the end? Short and sweet!

[Playa]

Thanks, appreciate the feedback. The audience will be for prospective buyers. We are a franchise system. That sales tool is exclusive to our network. Its a complimentary presentation to show value and wet their appetite for a resource that they can only get through us.

It will be mainly on display at trade shows and discovery meetings, but could be emailed to a prospect if we wanted to use it that way.

I'm like you, I don't like "showy" or busy presentations. May look at that last few seconds.

[Playa]

TTT for the evening shift

[tkuehn5410]

Enjoyed the video, and the speed at which the information is given. Everything was easy to follow and simply presented. I hate when people try to turn the 3 minute presentation into the 10 minute version.